Recount Writing-At the Park

I am learning to make my writing more interesting for my readers.

This is the published copy of my writing

On Saturday afternoon, I went to the park.  

First, I went on the bumpy slide. 
It was really bumpy.  

I giggled until we got to the bottom.  

Next, I went on the slippery monkey bars.  

They made me slip off.  

Then I went on the wobbly bridge. 
It was so wobbly I almost fell all the
way on the ground.  

Finally, my mum took me home.  I felt joyful.